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Preparation and Commentary

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Preparation and Commentary

This assignment required me to give a rough guide for the chapter titles and their contents and also provide a sample of around 1000 words from my essay. 

I started off by thinking about the research I have done and the themes that researcher had covered. I then thought about what I wanted to cover. Landscape is quite a niche area of art in general. The majority of the research covers art in general. Some of this research will be useful for my work as it will be applicable in this field. I wrote down the common themes and areas. I found the research covered certain areas like what caused the inequality, some talked about peoples experiences with it; whilst there was a lack of research on solutions to the problem. Most said it is a difficult thing to overcome, but none had in-depth workable solutions. I think because fighting against inequality in the world and fighting against inequality in the arts are very similar, one has influenced and caused the others, different methods and solutions must be utilised. 

I came up with three chapters which will form the body of my work. The introduction will be approximately 250 words, the conclusion being the same. My chapters will be approximately 1500 words. 

I decided that in my first chapter I will look at the causes of the inequality. This chapter will be a lot more general, as there are causes which have influenced landscape photography but are also direct causes in the wider art world, and indeed the whole world. Whilst some causes can be directly linked to landscape photography, others have influenced its course. 

The second chapter will look at effects that this inequality has had on women and in landscape photography itself. This will look more directly at the inequality in landscape photography. I will look at what effect this has had on the demography of photography and its effect on women. I will look how this has effected the general population as well. I believe this will be an important aspect of my research as whilst we can see how the inequality in landscape photography presents itself, we don’t see the effect that it has on everyone else.  

My last chapter will look at solutions to the problem. I propose a comprehensive list of solutions which I will research assiduously. I have noticed a lack of substantial solutions in my research. Researchers and scholars talk about the causes and the effects but those who talk about solutions are in a minority. 

I have looked at a variety of sources, including books, journals, websites, artists work and personal experiences. I have organised this research into my research folder. It is taking shape, I do need to organise it a bit better. I have printed out the resources, then I have made notes and picked out quotes and important parts on a separate page. Here is a link to my research folder page, here I will upload images showing my research. At a later date, I will upload images of my research to view online.  

Here is my assignment:

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Assignment Three

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Here is the annotated file I received back from my tutor:

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Here is the feedback that I filled in with additional comments form my tutor:

Feedback Report – Assignment ThreeDownload

I had my feedback tutorial today (13/3/2020). Before it, I was convinced that I was heading in the wrong direction and my work and research was rubbish. But this wasn’t completely the case. There are issues but these can be worked on and addressed, so I felt happier after the tutorial. 

The first thing was to change the word document to UK English. I could have sworn that I did this after the last tutorial, so I will have to check and see if my computer actually stored the change. 

The next point my tutor made was that I have done a lot of research, which is good but there lacks an explicit central thread. The things I need to address and answer are why is it important and why this topic. She said even though it is a niche topic, show that I am the most knowledgable person there. I like this advice. I have the research, and will add to it, I just need to analysis it and use it to support my ideas. 

I sent my introduction and my first chapter. My tutor said that I am mainly stating an idea and leaving it up to the reader to fill in the blanks, and I agree. Reading back over the chapter now, I can see the issues and mistake plain as day. I need to take greater care in future chapters with regards to this. One point in chapter one, I talk about the history, here I literally just talked about the history, but my tutor suggested talking about how it has progressed as this will add another dimension to my work ideas and thought process. 

When using a quote or paraphrasing, I need to take about it in their own context, then link it to my idea and thus it brings it into a new context. This linking is an important aspect, which is currently missing. When I ay something, I will need to explain why or why note s my tutor says this will leave people wondering. 

My tutor also recommends that I pay attention to my methodology as this in turn will help my work develop. I need to know why I am researching this, why is it important, and what is the issue in the topic. There should be a flow from question through to solution. This will bring the work together and create a solider piece of work. 

Lastly, she said that the ultimate goal is my own ideas. This is the key. The sources are to support and build my own ideas. To be honest, I have ideas, I know I do, these ideas helped me form my research. But I will admit to having trouble putting them down. Instead of analysing, I am describing. Instead of compiling their work as the idea, I need to explain my idea with support of these sources. I think this is the key part for me, I do have the ideas, it’s just the writing and analysis I am having problems with. But I can and will work on it for my future submissions.  

Responding to the Feedback

I feel that any issues I have with my work can be worked on, this is not how I felt before submitting this work, so I pleased about this. 

I still need to create an explicit central thread to my work, I need to be very specific. 

I need to talk about context when using quotes of paraphrasing, as this will aid the reader and my explanations better, and I can then create a link between it and my work. I need to use the sources as a support to build my own ideas. I will take this on board for my next assignment.  

Assignment Three – Plan

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Brief

Submit a plan of your extended written project (around 500 words) detailing the separate chapter headings and their content, including how you will distribute the 5,000 words of you extended written project.
Include a 500-1,00 word sample text. This could be a draft introduction or any other part of your extended written project that you’re able to write at this stage.

Preparation and Commentary

This assignment required me to give a rough guide for the chapter titles and their contents and also provide a sample of around 1000 words from my essay. 

I started off by thinking about the research I have done and the themes that researcher had covered. I then thought about what I wanted to cover. Landscape is quite a niche area of art in general. The majority of the research covers art in general. Some of this research will be useful for my work as it will be applicable in this field. I wrote down the common themes and areas. I found the research covered certain areas like what caused the inequality, some talked about peoples experiences with it; whilst there was a lack of research on solutions to the problem. Most said it is a difficult thing to overcome, but none had in-depth workable solutions. I think because fighting against inequality in the world and fighting against inequality in the arts are very similar, one has influenced and caused the others, different methods and solutions must be utilised. 

I came up with three chapters which will form the body of my work. The introduction will be approximately 250 words, the conclusion being the same. My chapters will be approximately 1500 words. 

I decided that in my first chapter I will look at the causes of the inequality. This chapter will be a lot more general, as there are causes which have influenced landscape photography but are also direct causes in the wider art world, and indeed the whole world. Whilst some causes can be directly linked to landscape photography, others have influenced its course. 

The second chapter will look at effects that this inequality has had on women and in landscape photography itself. This will look more directly at the inequality in landscape photography. I will look at what effect this has had on the demography of photography and its effect on women. I will look how this has effected the general population as well. I believe this will be an important aspect of my research as whilst we can see how the inequality in landscape photography presents itself, we don’t see the effect that it has on everyone else.  

My last chapter will look at solutions to the problem. I propose a comprehensive list of solutions which I will research assiduously. I have noticed a lack of substantial solutions in my research. Researchers and scholars talk about the causes and the effects but those who talk about solutions are in a minority. 

I have looked at a variety of sources, including books, journals, websites, artists work and personal experiences. I have organised this research into my research folder. It is taking shape, I do need to organise it a bit better. I have printed out the resources, then I have made notes and picked out quotes and important parts on a separate page. Here is a link to my research folder page, here I will upload images showing my research. At a later date, I will upload images of my research to view online.  

Here is my assignment:

Assignment ThreeDownload

Tutor Feedback

Here is a link to my tutor’s feedback for this assignment and also my comments and how I am responding to the feedback:

Tutor Feedback