Assignment Five – Final Draft

Brief

Submit a final draft of your extended written project to your tutor, implementing any changes or taking on board any advice given in their feedback on your draft manuscript.

• Submit a covering note identifying the parts of your extended written project that have been most substantially revised or developed. That way your tutor can focus on your revisions rather than re-reading the whole extended written project.
• Write an abstract for your extended written project (maximum 500 words) summarising the subject areas discussed in your extended written project and its key findings to conclusions. This will be used to archive your extended written project at OCA, and to identify appropriate assessors with related subject knowledge to formally assess your submission.

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Assignment Five

Here is my written project:

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Following my tutor tutorial on my first draft of my essay, I have made some changes. I have gone through and addressed the issue my tutor has highlighted. I have taken out the waffly bits of writing and have taken pieces out that were not need. 

I have changed several things throughout my work. I have made minor changes to chapter one. I have re-worked chapter two. I have kept some aspects the same but have added new information. The majority of chapter three is the same to the first draft, but I have done some minor changes here too.  

I have written my abstract which has come in at under 500 words. I did some research into abstracts before writing mine, I wanted to make sure I was writing the correct things in it. I have placed my abstract after my title page. I am not sure whether this is the correct place or whether it needs to be on a completely separate document. 

My written project take the following format:

• Title Page (Including title and word counts) 
• Abstract
• Contents Page
• Introduction
• Chapter One
• Chapter Two
• Chapter Three
• Conclusion
• References
• Figures
• Bibliography

I have included the images within the actual text as I felt it was easier to see the images next to the text that is exploring them. 

I believe this format is correct, and looks right. 

My work count has come in at 5384 without the quotes and referencing. It is 9181 in total including the referencing, quotes and bibliography. Without the bibliography it is 5929 words. The abstract is 465 words. 

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Rework – Final Draft

I have reached the end of my course and have compiled my final submission for assessment. 

I have edited my extended written project extensively along the way in light of feedback form my tutor, and this is my final submission: 

My work is titled – Gender Inequality in Landscape Photography.

My work features an abstract, a content page, an Introduction, three main chapters, a conclusion, a references list, a figures list and a bibliography. I have noted the word count on the first page of the document alongside the title and any relevant information. 

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Tutor Feedback

Here is a link to my tutor’s feedback for this assignment and also my comments and how I am responding to the feedback:

Tutor Feedback

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Assessment Criteria

Demonstration of subject based on knowledge and understanding

I believe I have demonstrate my knowledge of my subject. I have researched the topic extensively and have used this research in the formation of my essay. I have brought my knowledge and research together to form my final essay. I have explored various topics within my subject area and have brought these together in a coherent manner and have presented them together in my work. 

Demonstration of research skills

I have done some in-depth research into gender inequality in landscape photography. My research folder in evident for this. I have looked at various primary and secondary sources, in the form of books, journals, research papers, and websites. I have looked at the topic specifically but also looked further a field and have used that knowledge and explained in my work why it is relevant. I believe I had done extensive research for my work. 

Demonstration of critical And evaluation skills

I have presented my ideas and have provided an analysis and an evaluation. I have brought ideas together and analysed them and gave my own reasons. I felt I was critical of what research I would use as I had to analysis each resource and decided what to use and what not to use. I believe my evaluation skills can be seen in my final essay. I have brought my ideas together using my research and have presented complete final essay. 

Communication  

I have written blog post throughout my course, which I believe are clear and explain what I am doing. I believe I have communicated my ideas well. It is something that I have worked on from assignment three and have developed significantly. My tutor has mentioned that my sentences needed changing as they can be too wordy and I need to do a general proof-read, which I have done. I went over my work and changed any sections that didn’t make or could have been said easier.