Assignment Two

Here is the annotated file I received back from my tutor:

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Here is the feedback form that I filled in with additional notes from my tutor:

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I had a video feedback tutorial with my tutor on the 19th of November 2019 for assignment two. My tutor starts by addressing the technical issues surrounding my literature review. She advised me to check that my word document is set to UK English. This will help with spelling, as there was a few spelling mistakes. There were also numerous grammatical errors. These involve using the wrong tense, missing words, and apostrophes. She also advised the if a sentence has a running idea, I should use a semi-colon. I should also try to stick to one idea per sentence, instead of a sentence containing several. I did proofread this assignment, but have obviously missed quite a lot, so I will have to be more diligent in the future.  

We then moved onto my literature review. My tutor stated that see could see that I had done the work but the literature review wasn’t quite right. I need to center it around academic texts, choosing around three and go from there. I would need to summaries what the texts are saying, analysis it extensively and then state how this information informs my work. She also advised me not to look so narrowly when researching. The area I have chosen is quite focused and is a niche area, so there is a limited volume of research. My tutor advised me to widen my research, for example looking At gender theory. We talked about working on the literature review before starting assignment three, this is what I shall do. I will be reworking my literature review by summarising, analysing, and linking it to my work. I will be amending my submission dates in light of reworking this assignment, just so I have enough time and am not rushing.   

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Responding to the Feedback

I need to address the technical issues with my work. These are basic things that is being raised. I do proof-read but I have obviously missed quite a few issues here. 

The basis for my literature review is there but it is not evident in my assignment, instead it can be found on my research page. I need to rework this assignment quite extensively. I did look into what should be in a literature review and obviously mis-interpreted it. I will also widen my research area as there may be topics that relate but are not exactly on my topic, these may be helpful. I am going to rework my literature review in light of my recent feedback.